100 word challenge week # 8
One lovely day theres a very kind girl named Lily.Who's very excited for tomorrow. Lily wanted to make the time go faster. She took out her spellbook and did a time spell. the thing that she forgot is that she's not allowed to use magic on Earth. suddenly she got sent to the trial court.she has to do one trial to be set free.The trial that she'll need to do is to swim across a pool infested with very dangerous sharks.So then Lily started swimming across the pool.Two mins later she finish. She got sent to a white room. Flaming fireworks went off she celebrated.
Hello Sushilover,
ReplyDeleteAlways start sentences with a capital letter. Leave a space after each period. Avoid repeating words in a short piece of writing like this; you used 'trial' three times! You would benefit from word processing your story in a 'Word' document first, then copying and pasting it into your blog. 'Word' will help you realize where you have made spelling and grammar mistakes. Congratulations on completing the 100 Word Challenge Week #8.
Sincerely,
Mrs. Van